Can you please proof-read my website?

[NJ Devils Fan]

I made my own website and I have a "getting started" page. Can you please read it over and tell my if i should change anything or forgot anything? Thanks

Getting Started (http://njdevilsfan130.tripod.com/Getting_started.htm)

[Sting]

I like your site a lot, because it explains each section in a very simple, and easy to understand way. For people who are not knowledgable with fish and tanks, your site will be very helpful because they will be able to understand even the most complicated components of beginning a tank, which to me is the Biological and Mechanical Filtration, which you descirbed perfectly! Maybe if you are planning on setting up a new tank soon, you can take digital pictures of the process and make a guide to physcially setting it up. Like adding substrate, decorations, water, and plants. You also could add links to help readers continue their research, such as a link to The Krib for plants, Aquaria Central for fish help, and Fishprofiles.com for fish profiles (maybe even Takashi Amanos Nature Aquarium's site for enthusiatic readers). It looks good! The only thing I'd add is under the substrate section, a part about how you can add fertilizers such as Sera, or Fluorite as substrate to the tank, then a small layer of gravel over the top of it to help the plants grow more, and maybe something about adding liquid fertilizers to help growth, and CO2. Awesome job!

[carpguy]

NJ D,

Looks like a good start.

There is a formula out there somewhere for heaters that takes into account the ambient room temperature -- if you're keeping the room at 80 degrees, you don't really need a heater.

The 1-2 wpg in lights for a planted tank is considered fairly low light. I'm at 2.4 and wouldn't mind being brighter.

And just from an old english major, "lower the nitrates, which depict water quality" (at the end of cycling) is sort of an odd construction. "which indicate poor water quality" might be better.

But on the whole, nice! :D

[pinballqueen]

Overall, it's great!

There is one point I'd like to argue with: the timeframes you have listed for fishless and fishy cycling are a little optimistic, in my opinion. I've found that fishy cycling can take up to 3 months to be complete, depending on the type of fish and the person's diligence in cleaning and feeding properly. Everything I've read indicates that fishless can be done in a week or two, but usually takes a little longer.

Like I said, overall, this looks REALLY good, and there's a lot of good information, I just have the one issue with it (and it may be just a "me" thing and not everyone's experience...).

Good job! :cool:

EDIT: Grammar police issue: it's dechlorinator, not dechloronizer.

[JamisonBWolsh]

Ok.... Just because you can build a website... MUST you? Your info is great and the site is helpfull. But there are hundreds of other sites that provide the same info (this website being one). MY suggestion is to add something to yours that No other website has... What that could be..I dont know?

Ideas:

Live webcam
Live chat help at certain times on web
maybe list a phone number and provide over the phone assistance (second phones lines are cheap)

you have to make it look different then all the rest or you wont distinguish yourself.
If you did this YEARS ago, then you would have been one of the pioneers and would have built up a following (like this website)
Isay, if you want it to be successfull, you MUST do something original.

--Not to be mean or anything..---

[NJ Devils Fan]

Thanks for the kind words and suggestions, I just altered it with your suggestions.

Sting, I just finished setting up a 72g tank and I am fishless cycling it now. My dad might bring a digital camera home for a few days from work or I might borrow one from a friend and take pictures and put them on the site.

[Ronne]

JamisonBWolsh:

Why would you come out and say stuff like this? He's just looking for positive criticism and you attempt to corrupt yet another thread. Have you given any thought to the fact that this may be his first website? Give us all a break and lighten up a bit.
And in your words, "Not to be mean or anything"

[JamisonBWolsh]

well..sorry to say.. but sometimes the truth hurts. He needs to add something to his website that makes his stand out from the rest. When survivor first came out, wow..what a HIT... Never done before. NOW, its been copied to death. Sure, some of the copy cat shows are good, but never the same hit. Thats what Devil needs. He needs that same concept. Something to DRAW people to his website that makes his different from all the rest.

I gave correct criticism. If he listens to me, he can have the NUMBER 1 Aquatic website out there. OR he can listen to you and be just one website that copies the millions others that give just general info...

My path would lead him to success
yours will lead his website to certain Death.

Which to take? His choice....

[Sting]

I love your analogies. "Creatain death" Ha! That's great. You are a funny guy Jamison, funny guy. :rolleyes:

[NJ Devils Fan]

I don't have a webcam so doing something like that is impossible. Also, If I gave out my phone number, even my second line or cell, my mother would kill me because people would be calling at all different times, like in the middle of the night. And what if I didn't know the answer to their question, then I gotta feel like a banana head because I told them to call me and I can't help. Maybe you should give me your number and I will have tons of people call you at 2:00 a.m. asking about their fish.

Not to be mean or anything;)

[kveeti]

I think it is a great start and, like Sting said, the information is presented in an easy to understand way.

First, let me congratulate you on another aspect of your presentation - the often neglected but highly desirous comma. You use it beautifully, which makes sentences much easier to read!

OK, now for my bits......

Under Thermometers. "....these kinds of thermometers are more accurate then the ones..."

- the word should be than

Under Fishless Cycling. You say to use pure ammonia. One question I see here time and again is, "How do I know ammonia is pure?" You might want to add the information about shaking and foaming.

Under Adding Fish and Plants, beforehand is one word.

Under Weekly Maintenance, re water companies adding chlorine. Perhaps add information about chloramine, too.

[NJ Devils Fan]

Thanks kveeti, I will make the adjustments now.

[niner9]

Site looks great the only thing I found was in the substrate section it say's, {Anaerobic spots form when there is no little or no circulation}

I think what you meant to say was {Anaerobic spots form when there is little or no circulation }

Just remove the first no. Don't forget to let us know when it is all done. niner

Edit you might have meant this also, {Anaerobic spots form when there is too little or no circulation }

[NJ Devils Fan]

Thanks niner for catching that.

[JamisonBWolsh]

Hey.. those are just IDEAS that can make his website "jump out" from the thousand other websites...

One website has created a fish radio program to answer questions.

[Pootspete]

Nice site NJ. I know in time you may want to put a counter and guestbook. Keep up the great work!!!!

[125gJoe]

The site looks good! You may want to spell out Aquaria Central and have it as a clickable link... :)

[Orbitorly]

Well I am working on one to :D

Here it is

My Site (http://www.orbitsaquaria.FreeURL.com)

It's still being worked on..

[NJ Devils Fan]

Joe, I have the link to ac on the "others" page. Click the "home" link on the bottom and go to "other pages"

Again, thanks everyone.

[NJ Devils Fan]

Pootspete, I was looking for a counter, but I don't think they have one at tripod. I was looking all around and found nothing.

[Pootspete]

NJ, here is what I use. You can get a guestbook and counter and many other goodies.

http://bravenet.com/

[Faramir]

Neat. Concise.

A niggle - you might want to mention that stress coat and aquarium salt are not universally approved of, and that there is a lot of controversy there, especially wrt table salt, iodine myths, kosher salt etc. etc.