song im working on for my mom.

livebearerfreak

you are hypnotized! LOL
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theres one place u may go. one place u may stay, falling down isnt a way. staying in my arms
is ok. the best place for u to stay, is right here by my side! i miss you day and nite, alot of
times wen i get in fights, i wish u were here right here by my side, helping me so the pain subsides,
i can go crazy once in a while, but that usealy ends very mild, i now ur watching me down from
heaven, i can get b**chy once in awhile, but thats normal teenage style, i still remember the last
Xmas, it was very presiouse, but i do tend to kick myself for not spending more time with you,instead
i was fighting-yelling-running away - i regret those everyday, i miss the way we use to play and the
times we use to hang out, im regreting the times i fought and the times i hurt you, regret is taking
over my mind, but you'll always have me inside!

not done yet but what ya think?
 
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for those who dont kno my mom died a year and a half ago from a brain cancer called-glioblastomia multi form grade 4 stage 4 the toughest cancer to beat she survived 2 years of it
 
i wont forget that nite u died, i stayed up the next nite and started crying, the pain has
finaly reached me, knoing u wont be here to hold me, everyday and nite seems as if ur still
here but in all reality im still living in my tears, mama aint here, i got a lot to fear, i
have alot of learning to bear, alota growing up to do, without u here its hard to handle, u
use to protect me threw thick and thin, even wen i lyed way over my head,you would ground me
and send me to bed, kno i now thats what u had to do, u want ur little man to grow up and
protect himself well mama im here and ill make u proud as hell.

not done again yet but how u lik it?
 
another one not done but all i can think of,


not a day goes by i still think of u inside, i even stay up all nite and start to cry,
i want u by my side, mama i miss u worse then the day u died, its takin a toll on me inside
i want to go buy u a present but realizeing ur not here its really sad, cant remember the last
time u had a smile on ur face well i can but it still hurts inside plz mama come back so
everything can be ok, we can go threw and make millions everyday, have money put away for future
toys we can buy for ur grandchildren anyday, ma u kno how much i miss ya, well ask the 5 familys
i went threw that couldnt handle me, they all tell me that everything went to them and i had
nothing really left from ya, that hurt me big time but knoing u i still have ur love and i kno
ya have lots awaiting fa me, i love ya ma and always will.
 
I definitely like this. What's important is that all of this is coming from the heart and you're being sincere and not embellishing your feelings at all.

I'd like to see you break the lines where they rhyme so it flows better to the reader.

Overall, I really like this and I think you're very talented.

Keep jotting your thoughts down. All of this is great.
 
It's very nice............and I'm so, so sorry for the loss of your Mom. In the beginning you talk about regretting the fighting and so on, but let me tell you from a mother's perspective. I have 2 girls, age 22 and 20 and the 20 yr. old gave me a lot of grief.........but I told her that I ALWAYS love her. Sometimes I didn't like her much, but always love her. So just know that no matter what grief you gave your Mom, she loved you........always........and always will. Mom's know that kids are kids and teenagers are a completely different species than the human race...:) God bless you!
 
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