I can actually give some input, I am well used to sumps having owned several saltwater and reef tanks.
First, overall looks good. Your third and last chamber are connected so the water will drop in both those areas with evaporation over time. You could do away with the baffle next to the pump honestly. I see why it's there (to prevent air bubbles) and it won't hurt to have it there but you could also free up space by removing it. In my own experience having the pump far away from where the water enters usually has no problems with air bubbles.
If you didn't want the water to drop in both 3rd and last chamber you could put another baffle there, but I would caution about that. The return pump area on its own is not very big and if you are not carefully monitoring that water drop it would drop to low levels quickly (because it's so small).
The biggest piece of advice I can give is make sure where the water enters the display tank is not TOO submerged into the water. When power goes off it will back siphon, so put the water entering the tank close to the surface of the water or you can install a siphon break in the pipe.
Once you get the sump setup and running in the tank, and everything is going great, unplug the return pump and watch it close. If water backsiphons into the sump you need to make sure the sump can handle it. If it gets too full have a hose on hand to start sucking water out. This is so that in the case of a power failure you don't flood around your tank!